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雅思大作文解析:教育罪犯有效的方式

2021-07-05 13:37| 來源:環球教育 | 點擊量:次

摘要: 觀點類大作文,犯罪類話題 It is shown that many criminals have a low level of education. Some people argue that the best way to reduce crime is to educate criminals in prison to help them find jobs when they leave prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

觀點類大作文,犯罪類話題

 

It is shown that many criminals have a low level of education. Some people argue that the best way to reduce crime is to educate criminals in prison to help them find jobs when they leave prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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題目來源:2018年11月3日大陸雅思大作文

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題目大意

據說很多犯罪分子教育程度很低。有觀點稱減少犯罪的辦法是在監獄中教育他們,幫助他們出獄找工作。同意反對?

 

 

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思路解析

這是一道觀點類大作文,討論的如何減少犯罪的問題,題目中提出的觀點是:針對犯罪分子教育程度低,是在監獄中提供教育幫助他們出獄后找工作。審題時要注意的是題目中給出了詞“the best way”,一般遇到詞,我們都可以從反對角度切入會更好寫(如果同意的話,我們得論證這個辦法確實比別的更加有效,難度會很高)。

而在反駁題目邏輯時,可以采取2種思路,一是推翻對方結論的前提——即對方對犯罪原因的分析有誤,進而分析出其他可能的原因,并給出相應的辦法;二是推翻對方的辦法——即對方的辦法有問題,所以不可行,進而給出更好的辦法。

 

針對給教育程度不高的罪犯,在監獄中提供教育的機會來幫助他們出獄后找到工作,確實是一個有效的辦法。因為很多時候他們犯罪就是因為缺乏謀生手段,進而為了生計進行犯罪。如果只是單純刑滿釋放,出獄后他們依然缺乏合法的謀生手段,很有可能會進行二次犯罪。而通過提高他們的教育水平,教授他們手藝和技能,使得他們出獄后有了更好更安全的賺錢方式的話,自然也就減少了犯罪的可能性。

 

但是這個方式不能稱之為方式,因為它僅僅解決了部分問題,而引發犯罪的原因本身是個復雜的問題,有各方面因素考量,包括外部環境和當事人自身原因,針對不同情況有效的辦法也不一樣。

首先這個方法并沒有辦法有效減少“犯罪的”數量,它是在人們進行了一次犯罪進到了監獄后才采取的一種手段。其次,有一些犯罪和教育程度并無關系或是犯罪分子本身具備高學歷,比如暴力犯罪、模仿犯罪或是經濟犯罪等,針對這些情況,這個手段用處也不并不大。

而針對這些犯罪手段,可能會需要更多的普法宣傳、嚴厲打擊犯罪行為來威懾潛在犯罪分子,培養犯罪分子的社會責任心而非教育水平,或是營造更健康和良好的社會環境等手段。

 

 

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范文示例

While it is assumed that the key solution to curb crimes is to educate prisoners about working skills, I do not think that it is rational to attribute pervasive criminality solely to illiteracy and therefore regard vocational training as the panacea to constrain the trend. 

 

Indeed, it is easy to understand why this opinion in question is favored by some people. From their perspective, the major reason leading to illegal activities is the lack of schooling: it is true that many offenders embark on the path of crimes (e.g. theft, robbery) because they do not possess the needed degrees or basic skills to find a job; unfortunately, pure imprisonment does little to change their lives after releasing. In this sense, to train them basic vocational skills in prison seems to be a fundamental solution to prevent them from committing the same crimes after release. 

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However, it is not justified enough to recognize education as the key method to constrain the criminal activities. It is oversimple to attribute crimes exclusively to lack of education. Rather, the worrying trend is a complicated problem which is caused by various culprits; for example, the detrimental impact of media that makes young people aggressive and violent, and the many financial frauds are committed mainly by those with professional backgrounds. In response to these problems, multiple measures are needed instead of solely relying on vocational training. As an alternative, the government can institute laws against violence and obscene contents on TV and computer games, mitigating the possibility of young minds being exposed to offensive contents and therefore translating the plots in the virtual world into reality. As well as the media censorship, social service can play a part in cultivating a sense of social responsibility among those criminals with higher education. Both practices seem to have equally effective influence on crimes as educating prisoners. 

 

In conclusion, it looks simplistic to assume improved education as the best way to limit crimes, whereas other options might be equally effective in tackling the problem. 

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相關詞匯和語法結構

panacea  靈丹妙藥 

curb  遏制 

misbehavior  不良行為 

fundamental  根本的 

institute  提出  

obscene  不良的 

media censorship  媒體監管 

Fraud  詐騙 

 

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